We writers are gifted with turning a phrase, but with that power comes great responsibility.
By Elizabeth Cutright
I, like most high school students in the US, read the novel 1984 by George Orwell (part of an ingenious triple play by my English teacher, who concurrently assigned Brave New World and The Handmaids Tail for a post-apocalyptic triptych) as part of my senior English class. Although the year 1984 had passed by the time Orwell’s grim vision of the future hit my desk, I remember feeling a vague foreboding – we were not out of the woods yet. This malaise only grew when I completed my teacher’s final assignment: write one of the missing chapters of Winston’s “book”.
I remember choosing “War is Peace.” I remember that I got an A+ on the assignment. Makes me wonder if my teacher detected some latent talent. Later, while trapped in the Orwellian nightmare that is law school, I realized a talent for doublespeak can come in handy – particularly when you’re tasked with playing devil’s advocate.
I used the well-worn phrase, “the pen is mightier than the sword,” in a recent post about putting drama on the page. But as many of you know, those words are actually associated with political speech, covering both dissent and persuasion.
Or as Depeche Mode once sang, “You can’t change the world, but you can change the facts. And when you change the facts, you change points of view. When you change points of view, you can change a vote, and when you change a vote, you can change the world.”
We are writers, and that means we are gifted with turning a phrase, finding the right adjective or adverb for the right situation, and using our creative muscle to draft a compelling scene, invoke a powerful emotion, and change an opinion.
As always, with that power comes great responsibility.
At least that’s what I believe – and that belief comes, in part, from my own experiences with doublespeak: in law school, in the workplace, and in the media. How many times have you heard or read something you believed it to be true, only to stumble upon a different version making you question your first impression?
It happens all the time, and when the truth is obscured, we all lose.
In Writeful, Gary Hoffman warns against this type of writing, which he calls “Making Faces.” According to Hoffman, we should never fall into the trap of writing insincerely or using language as a form of intimidation. Not only can the results be dishonest and the intent questionable, the final product is often not very good.
“Aside from usually being immoral or unethical, this inflation and deception is sure to bore at best, and embarrass at worst,” says Hoffman.
Sometimes writers add layers of prose in order to avoid giving the straight truth.
Hoffman identifies three different writing “faces”: facial packs, war paint, and the metal mask. Facial packs come in first, and are considered the least objectionable by Hoffman. Another way to think of facial packs is to associate them with euphemisms. Most of the time, we use this type of writing to avoid detailing something that makes us uncomfortable, like death or sex. Think of all the colorful language that comes from just those two activities – “kicking the bucket”, “the beast with two backs”, and my favorite (which in a way unites the two) “kissing daisies.”
“Facial packs are the least objectionable faces to make,” explains Hoffman. “These include attempts to make most unimportant, normal-but-unappetizing realities more pleasing than they really are.”
Are you guilty of Face-packing? The best way to find out is to try it yourself. Hoffman suggests an exercise that involves taking something simple and making it complicated. For example, in the exercise below I picked declining an invitation to a party. Following Hoffman’s instruction, I broke it, down into a step-by-step process, and then came up with five, never-before-used, euphemism to summarize all those steps. After completing the exercise, I saw how I sometimes add layers in order to avoid giving the straight truth. For me, it’s hard to say “no” to people…I don’t want to hurt anybody’s feelings. Maybe now, I’ll just use one of my handy new euphemisms!
After completing the exercise, I saw how I sometimes add layers in order to avoid giving the straight truth. For me, it’s hard to say “no” to people…I don’t want to hurt anybody’s feelings. Maybe now, I’ll just use one of my handy new euphemisms!
Work Out Exercise 1: Declining an Invitation
You receive an invitation to an event you do not want to attend. On the invitation are details about the event – time, place, type – and instructions on how to RSVP. After noting the particulars of the event and determining that you do not want to attend, you must contact the host and explain that you will not be there. At the time of that conversation, you may be called upon to expand on your explanation and give specific reasons as to why you are not attending the event. The conversation ends when the host understands that you will not be attending.
Euphemisms for the entire process described above:
1) Remorsefully declining.
2) Clearing out space for other guests.
3) Making sure there’s enough cake to go around.
4) Saving space.
5) Apologetic Absence
The downside of war paint writing is that it intimidates the reader while also allowing the writer to exaggerate the importance of their topic.
When it comes to War Paint, Hoffman’s second making faces category, you begin to wade into the territory of professional and technical writing. While it is sometimes necessary to use terms of art familiar to the industry you’re writing for work, according to Hoffman, the downside of war paint writing is that it intimidates the reader while also allowing the writer to exaggerate the importance of their topic.
On the upside, once you know their tricks, the war paint writer is easy to spot. Unnecessarily complicated language, overuse of “big”, multi-syllabic words, maybe some peppering of Latin and Greek – these are all signs that the war paint is in full force. Sometimes a simple action – “said” for example – is described using only vague synonyms: “indicated,” “observed,” “implied.”
“These writers have usually pumped themselves up so much in order to get their face prepped that they are unable to see how foolish they appear to a knowing victim.”
In Hoffman’s second exercise, you’re asked to take some simple, well-worn phrases and complicate the heck out of them.
Work Out Exercise 2: Simple phrases made complicated.
1) Simple: It is what it is.
Complicated: That which may or may not exist in a realm that may or may not be perceivable to the naked eye or some other such sense as is the most adequate to perceive a person, place, thing or situation (i.e., eyes may see, ears may hear, and a hand may feel that something is or is not there) can ultimately be defined by its essential nature.
2) Curiosity killed the cat.
Wondering, questioning and generally searching for answers ultimately results in the subsequent demise of the unfortunate feline that initiated the inquiry.
3) A bird in the hand is worth two in the bush.
When it comes to valuing the relative value of an avian entity, the general assumption is that a feathered creature that is currently clutched within the grip of its assumptive owner can be assessed at a higher value than double the number of similar animals that have not, in fact, been equally incarcerated.
The Metal Mask
The Metal Mask is a code for complex problems so makes the discussion of problems simpler and quicker, but sometimes metal mask can unintentionally hide reality.
Finally, we’ve hit the most notorious face-making writing of all: the metal mask. Virtually interchangeable with Orwell’s doublespeak, the metal mask uses jargon, labels, and buzzwords to obscure what is actually really being said.
“Metal maskers argue that such jargon-face is necessary: it is a code for complex problems so makes the discussion of problems simpler and quicker. But sometimes metal mask can unintentionally hide reality.”
I’ve got to be honest – particularly in light of the current political climate – I seriously doubt that the metal masking is unintentional. There’s an advantage to be had by hiding what you’re saying. Jargon familiar to only one small subset of people locks out the larger audience and makes the ideas and opinions expressed by the writer impenetrable. Have you ever tried to read the tax code? Or a report on subsidies? I interact with industry-based jargon every day, and I can tell right away if it’s being used to enlighten the audience or keep them in the dark. It’s easy to tip into the latter, particularly if you’re quoting “experts in the industry.”
And after surviving law school, I have a particular aversion to this type of writing, even as I am forced to acknowledge that I have a special aptitude for it. But forearmed is forewarned as far as I’m concerned!
In Hoffman’s final exercise, you’re asked to take a simple task and break it down with jargon, warnings, and complex sub-steps until it is almost meaningless.
Below is my attempt – would love to hear what you think.
Work Out Exercise 3: Doublespeak
Activity: Washing Clothes
Double Speak Version:
The act of gathering a multitude of garments – many of which are most likely teeming with a variety of bacteria in addition to stains, smells and other signs of wear – in order to cleanse the fabrics of those garments, is a multistep process that can be both complicated and time consuming. It must be noted that failure to precisely follow these directions could result in damage to the clothes being washed, as well as possible malfunction of equipment which could lead to a pipe burst (and resultant flooding and water damage) or electrical fire (which could ignite not just the structure where the device is kept, but could in fact spread, endangering entire neighborhoods and fragile habitats). Please follow the directions below in order to insure that your clothes washing proceeds without misstep or injury.
The first step for laundering clothes involves a separation of garments. Two to five piles of clothes will most likely result from this weeding action; depending on the types of fabrics you wear and the predominance of colors in your wardrobe. First, divide you jackets, shirts, pants, dresses and undergarments into two piles – “light” and dark.” Light garments will tend to fall towards the light (white) end of the color spectrum while darker colors will fall nearer to black. From within those piles, separate further until you have created groups of clothing that are consistently hued.
The next step can be repeated with each grouping. Once you have determined the color grade of the clothes to be washed, consult with the washing machine manual to determine the setting needed for optimal cleansing. The manual will also advise the timing of detergent distribution – for some washing machine units, soap should be added prior to clothing, while other units are designed to accept detergent once the all of the garments have been placed in its receptacle. It is also important to follow the directions in your manual regarding the type of detergent that should be used. There are several varieties to choose from, all of which tend to fall into one of two major categories: liquid and powder.*
Once you have placed the clothes and detergent into the washer and followed the manual directions for the wash settings, hit the “power” button and begin the process. Make sure to monitor the machine as it runs through the washing cycle in order to insure that the machine is running appropriately and so that you can promptly remove your clothing once the wash cycle is done.
*Directions and descriptions for detergent accessories – fabric softener, stain remover, bleach etc – can be found under the heading, “Increasing the Effectiveness of the Wash Cycle.”
Cover photo by Newtown graffiti via Flickr
*This content was originally published on June 8, 2012
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